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Good morning everyone . Have you ever heard of the book< Charlie and the chocolate factory?It is a very interesting piece of the book by Roald Dahl .I have been interested in reading this fantasic masterpice for a long time . It is not onlycan make you laugh and also can learn more reason . Sometime make readertightness . That's why I choose this book. The beginning is about have a luckychilren call Charlie in a village . He love chocolate but as his familyis poorso he can't usually buy . Fifteen year prior , Willy Wonka opened the largest chocolate factory in the world , but spies his recipes , so he eventually close the factory . But one day , he decided allow five child to visit the factory .Charlie Bucked win tickets and visit the factory . There were some amazingthings and four children . In the the end as those four children are naught indifferent ways , the finally lose the contest . Charlie's prize is that he can become Willy Wonka's successor and to have the whole factory and live with his family forever . I love this book because this book are not only funny ,but also full of virtues , implying that good children have luck in reward , nomatter the are rich or poor . charlieis born in a poor family , but he is niceand care family . And it allows the readers to get in an imaginary world inwork . This book also bring out important messages . It shows me that should behonest and be brave , and know how to care and love family . The character Ilike most in the book is charlie because he was a good boy , optimistic and cheerful . Although he so poor , he cared and loved for his family and always behave well . He never too proud or arrogant unlike other kids . And he never think asked for his family opinions . That show he were an obedient boy. My favourite scene is the inventing room , there are many new products , manyof them are unheard of , and many not exist in the real world . Everything isbeyond my imagination .

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    Good morning everyone . Have you ever heard this book <Charlie and the chocolate factory> ? It is a interesting book which is written by Roald Dahl .I am interested in reading this kind of fantasic masterpice . It not only can make you laugh , but you also can learn more reason from it . Sometime make readertightness . That's why I choose this book. This book is about a lucky children who live in a village is called Charlie . He loves chocolate but he is poor so he can't usually buy it . Fifteen years ago , Willy Wonka opened the largest chocolate factory in the world , but someone spies his recipes , it let him closes the factory eventually . But one day , he decided to allow five children to visit the factory .Charlie Bucked won the ticket to visit the factory . There were some amazing things to the four children . In the end of those four children were naught in different ways , they finally lose the contest . Charlie's prize is that he can become Willy Wonka's successor and he can own the whole factory with his family . I love this book because it is funny and full of virtues . It imply that good children have luck in reward , no matter they are rich or poor . charlie was borned in a poor family , but he is nice and care to his family . And it allows the readers to get into an imaginary world . This book also bring us an important message . It shows us that we should be honest and brave , and know how to take care of our family . The character I like the most in the book is charlie because he is a optimistic and cheerful boy . Although he is poor , he loves his family and always behave well . He never proud or arrogant unlike other kids . And he never ask for others opinions . That show he is obedient . My favourite scene is the inventing room , there are many new products , many of them are unheard of , and many not exist in the real world . Everything is beyond my imagination .

    你寫的文章有很多難詞(vocab)

    有幾句我睇唔明

    不過我改左你好多grammer

    我中四啦,改你應該無點錯-.-

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