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Preservingheritage or urban planningInrecent years , the government has knocked down some heritages in HongKong in order to provide more space for urban development. Modernshopping centers and industrial buildings become predominant insteadof valuable heritages. It has ignited public indignation andcriticism from preservationists. Some opponents protest against theidea of staying at the heritage, being unwilling to leave and eat.They just want to protect the heritages the overwhelming with theirmemories.Isit really the case tat heritage preservation always hinders urbandevelopment? No, it isn't. There are some arguments that can clarifymy views.Inpoints of economic development, preservation of heritages in our citybrings about economic boom. Nowadays, people around the world areprone to spend time to broaden their horizons on historical literacy.Most of us prefer to visit the places with valuable features justlike visiting the Great Wall and Forbidden City Beijing,Status ofliberty in the USA. These are regarded as imperative, non-materialculture in their countries and their cities. Inother words, the historical heritages can become a striking point toattract tourists from all around the world to visit our cities . Inturn, the flourish of tourists give rise to other advantages thatboost our economy as they go shopping to buy their favorite or highquality products. For example, electronic devices including Ipad,mobile phone , camera and so on. And, ladies grasp the opportunitiesto buy their beautiful jewellery , accessories in Hong Kong. It isobvious enough the preservation of heritages is indeed a prerequisiteelement to urban development ,

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Cultural development is also a rudimentary ingredient for sustainable urban development. Hong Kong is regarded as a desert of Culture by others . IT is without doubt that the government always leave preservation of heritages and other culture developments along.

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Enterprise and government only keep an eye on the economic and politic issues. They are not responsible to heritage preservation. What is a pity and what selfish they are .If the Queen pier and Clock Tower had preserved, more and more westerners would have got acquaintance without lyric culture and

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the history in Hong Kong. There is a undeniable fact that Hong Kong gradually lose their originally distinctive. Out next generations can only see prosperous cities with luxury buildings and modern shopping centers. They are just infill with economic development , lamentably, they know little about

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the past in Hong Kong, if not the cultural development and heritage preservation. There is a research conducted by Hong Kong University recently ,11 to 16 know the origin and history of clock tower and Queen pier or other demolished and inexistent heritages.

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Having good work in heritage preservation is one of the routes to raise our international image.

Some people may argue that preservation of heritages only waste money but do nothing to our city. Some heritages are of dull and have dilapidated features. They make city look impoverished. I am definite

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  • aShlEy
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    9 年前
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    1centres(English speeling more appropriate)leave or eat(否定句)...heritages which exist not only in their memories but also in the city to overwhelming the merely short-sighted economic development

    2para2+3 better...that(wrong typing)...is not,X visiting(not necessary) ... imperative and non-material culture heritages

    3In return...(one action=it)gives rise, favoutite(English spelling)jewellery and accessories.."desert of culture",leave...along→set aside

    4Enterprises and the government...responsible for...how selfish..had been preserved(passive)→not true preserved and will be rebuilt somewhere else,an undeniable..loses(Hong Kong,sing.) its original(adj→n) distinction(surely noun)next generation/descendants...the prosperous city(just one)...centre...in fill with→take account of...the past of Hong Kong...is→has been(recently)...the..University...11-16%...dull and with...features, which

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