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coco 發問於 社會及文化語言 · 9 年前

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Most people are constrained to do the objects. They wait the chance to leave the constriants world. In the reality, what kind the object in world is not come from constraint? In the picture "Waited" by Clive Smith the environment, the girl and the blanket behind the girl's back are show how constrain to move the world.

In the picture, the environment brought very strong constraints. The background in the picture was very dark colour and it showed hopness and melancholy. The girl constrians to stay in the dark place; she cannot leave and just waits her wish come truth. The light shoots on the girl and we see the girl feels hopness and melancholy. The light means the wish for the girl but the girl thought her dream will never come truth.

When the light shoots on the girl, we see she showed very hopness, sorrowful and melancholy. Some of the body psychologist told if we don't want to hear some bad happen, then our feets will direct to the door. Same as the girl, her feet directs to forward, which means she is not voluntarily to stay in the room. The clothes that she wears it can show he wish will disappear soon. The white clothes behalf hape; however the white clothes are easy to get dark. the dark colour covers the white clothes slowly, also behalf the wish will disappear soon. She belived no one can help her but she believes one thing that can help her is Jesus. She closes her eyes, puts her plams togeth and wishes jesus can help her leave this place. This action also contraints of the environment because the girl thought no one can help her and just wants her heart feels relax.

At the same time, she puts her plams together also means she doesn't want to the blanket shelter he around. The blanket such as the lid. She must cover it ever she goes anywhere. She constrains contol by the blanket. The blanket also perfect fit on her back. The blanket means not to keep the girl warm, it means pressure and worries. In the real life, many things are coming from constraints.

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  • Jenkin
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    9 年前
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    對不起,文法實在有太多錯了,首先留意串字,constraint是名詞,constrain是動詞,這個字差不全篇都串錯用錯;還有你用這個字的意思是甚麼?抑制,強迫,束縛?按你的文章描寫那畫的意思,我估計是限制或是圍住的意思,可以用enclose, entrap, restrict等等不同的字來描述不同角度的限制。

    另一個字object亦不明白是甚麼意思。這是首段你自己作的評論,沒有其他參無法看明白你想說的理論。另外還有很多串錯字。

    另外全文是敘述或評述一幅畫所表達的感覺和意義,應該當是報告以past tense寫作會比較好。

    只能給你一點意思,實在無法幫你全改:

    ...

    In the picture, the environment brought very strong constraints. The background in the picture was very dark colour and it showed hopelessness and melancholy. The girl was constrained to stay in the dark place; she could not leave and just waited her wish come truth. The light shot on the girl and we saw the girl felt hopelessness and melancholy. The light meant the wish for the girl but the girl thought her dream would never come truth.

    ...

    At the same time, she put[] her palms together also meant she didn't want [] the blanket to shelter around her. The blanket is like a lid. She must cover it wherever she went[]. She [constrains(???)] was controlled by the blanket. The blanket also perfect fit on her back. The blanket did not mean to keep the girl warm, it meant pressure and worries. In [] real life, many things were coming from constraints. [最後這句:many things were coming from constraints完全解不通你的意思:現實生活中,很多東西都是由強迫而產生?是由限制而產生?是由規範而產生?按英語人慣用的constraint這個字義,會理解為:是由規範而產生。]

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