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Based on our investigation, energy crisis is a serious problem in many countries. The crisis can be cause by industrial actions, over-consumption, severe weather, aging infrastructure, attacks by terrorists or militia on infrastructure, choke point disruption, political events and others that restrict fuel supply.

In 2006 and 2009, some people died in cold weather as Russia interrupted natural gas to the Ukraine. In August 2003, New York have blackout, as aging infrastructure, that caused over city shut down and under scare.

According to the following data, HK uses much energy every year, but all energy supplies entirely from external sources. And HK does not have any natural source in energy. However, Australia has large natural resources of fossil fuels, coal and uranium. Also, Australia exports ~12000PJ energy products each year. At first, we were considering which/what energy products from where supply in HK. According to the following data, oil products and coal are the major energy source in HK. As much coal will be transfer to electricity.

If energy crisis occur in HK would cause the situation as bad as New York. Several solutions have been adopted in different countries to tackle the problems. For example, over the world strengthen the protection of infrastructure such as oil pipes and electricity plants; develop renewable energy and green products. In China, government uses many economic and political methods to develop renewable energy such as wind power and solar energy. We consider HK condition and our target-make money from HK market, so we suggest developing a new green electrical product. Also, space conditioning is the biggest part of electricity end-use, so we suggest the product can save more energy on air-conditions as space conditioning is largest part of Electricity End-uses in HK.

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    2. Findings

    Based on our investigation, energy crisis is a serious problem in many countries. The crisis can be (caused) by industrial actions, over-consumption, severe weather, aging infrastructure, and attacks by terrorists or militia on infrastructure, choke point disruption, political events and others that restrict fuel supply.

    In 2006 and 2009, some people died in cold weather as Russia interrupted natural gas to the Ukraine. In August 2003, New York (had) (a) blackout, (due to) aging infrastructure, (which) caused (the whole) city shut down and under scare.

    According to the following data, HK uses much energy every year, but all energy supplies (are) entirely from external sources. And HK does not have any natural source(s) (of) energy. (While) Australia has large natural resources of fossil fuels, coal and uranium. Also, Australia exports ~12000PJ energy products each year. At first, we were considering which/what energy products from where supply in HK. According to the following data, oil products and coal are the major energy (sources) in HK (, as much) coal will be (transferred) (into) electricity.

    If energy crisis (occurs) in HK (, it will cause) the situation as bad as (New York’s). Several solutions have been adopted in different countries to tackle the problems. For example, over the world (strengthens) the protection of infrastructure such as oil pipes and electricity plants; (develops) renewable energy and green products. In China, (governments use) many economic and political methods to develop renewable (energies) such as wind power and solar energy. We consider HK condition and our target-make money from HK market, so we suggest developing a new green electrical product. Also, space conditioning is the biggest part of electricity end-use, so we suggest the product can save more energy on air-conditions as space conditioning is largest part of Electricity End-uses in HK.

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