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Swing 發問於 社會及文化語言 · 1 十年前

我想加長呢句英文,但係我英文唔係好好,有冇人可以幫幫我?

呢個係關於我做緊的商業科Project的,我地要做一份自己開公司的報告

我地想做女性時裝店,店名係"Sexy Ladies",

其他野大致上都ok架喇,只係有一個問題

我地第一版要講"The Mission of our company is:"

咁我地都寫左少少,

Is joined to the suitable clothes for each lady,displays most beautiful one side,become people's focal point.

但係太少了,我地睇以前人地做的果d都係寫左半版至一版到的,但係我地實在唔知點樣加長佢好,

有冇高人可以幫幫我?

千萬個Thanks~!!

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  • winwin
    Lv 6
    1 十年前
    最愛解答

    Mission Statement 唔應該太長架喎... ..

    之後再解就長啲, 系另一回事.. 應該系要簡而精.

    我推介如下 :

    不如, 我建議你先寫句Mission先... 主句 / 第一句畀個清晰意思人知道.. 之後prolong佢個意思.. 好唔好 ?

    而且, 你間時裝店系做高價時裝定系底價? 系唔系full collection? 少女 / 中女? 內,外衣? 袋, 鞋… ?? 有無用比較環保物料呀 (系賣點)?? 一間店定系幾間?啲衫系自己design定買入(都系買點之一)? 咁啲product系邊來? (European fashion, Japanese fashion,… or?).... 因為系好影響個statement點寫

    Promote the sexiest & trendiest female lifestyle (or, 你可以用fashion嘅… 不過, 我prefer用lifestyle)

    l Promoting the Sexy Ladies shop as the sexiest & trendiest fashion cloths provider in the market (因為已有一句mission statement, 里句可以唔要)

    l Turning the Sexy Ladies as the most popular (or favorable) choice and remarkable symbol in the market

    l Enhancing female confident by wearing the best and unique outfits offering by Sexy Ladies.

    l Providing “1-stop” service that enables consumers having full excitement to get wide range of products within the Sexy Ladies shop.

    l Being as the fast-moving fashion brand and keeps our consumers happiest during every visit

    l Symbolizing the Sexy Ladies as our consumers’ lifestyle; Wear it ever day and night! ( 如果無賣sleepwear or 內衣… 就唔好寫every night喇)

    另外, 你要了解多啲乜嘢系mission statement.. 有啲公司, 用得仲短..

    A mission statement is a formal, short, written statement of the purpose of a company or organization. The mission statement should guide the actions of the organization, spell out its overall goal, provide a sense of direction, and guide decision-making. It provides "the framework or context within which the company's strategies are formulated."[1]

    Mission statements often contain the following:

    Purpose and aim of the organization The organization's primary stakeholders: clients, stockholders, congregation, etc. Responsibilities of the organization toward these stakeholders Products and services offered http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mission_statement

    資料來源: 希望幫到你啦
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  • Jenkin
    Lv 7
    1 十年前

    先恕我講一句這段不是英文,連chinglish都不是,我要用中文「詞語」來讀才知你想講乜,沒有中文語文的「英文人」不會看得明,識英文的「中文人」會看不起你這個品牌。你還是努力進修下,否則你畢到業都會激死請你個老闆。

    我只可以用估的方法幫你組一些重點:

    Mission of the Company:

    1. To select the best fitting for every lady according to her unique body shape and personality.

    2. To showcase the best feminine feature for every lady through our fashion sense.

    3. To provide selections of fashion to equip every lady to be able to be the foucs of attention.

    4. To cover full range of lady fashion from undergarments to ball room dresses.

    5. To support local designers and garment industry for the high-end lady fashion.

    6. To be the local prominent lady fashion brandname.

    7. To create international influence on the lady fashion design and retail markets

    按你所願以最長的寫作方式來表達並加上一些遠景,是否作為公司策略的表達則見見仁見智。因為這是一份business setup plan,希望你不是在金百利開間「時裝店」而是成為香港的Victoria Secret才配得上你起的品牌名。

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  • 匿名
    1 十年前

    我推薦您一個非常不錯的英語學習網站,里面有很多非常不錯的學習資源:

    http://www.hkenglishstudy.info

    希望可以幫到你!

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  • 1 十年前

    1. extend: joins to the suitable clothes for each lady: How to joint? By carrying out interviews? Observing the changes of styles?etc

    2. extend: displays most beautiful one side: Whatis beautiful? Matching the public's needs? Do you mean the types of patterns? Colours? Styles? give some kind of DEFINITION.

    3. become people's focal point: how to develop it to people's focal point? advertisement?any team/ department responsible for that? or any plan?

    4. all of your plans are good. But you better explain how to execute them. Plans and people responsible are very important.

    5. Is joined to the suitable clothes for each lady,displays most beautiful one side,become people's focal point. This is a great idea. However, it is not clear enough. almost all fashion companies have the same explanation. You have to make it unique by adding your special points.

    2010-04-22 23:39:39 補充:

    to join-_

    資料來源: myself=]
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