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Ladies and gentleman, welcome to our show. I am delighted that you’re here. Our outfit was designed based on the theme -- casual. Our purpose of the design is comfortable and convenience for the young. They are suitable for any place in any time. Also, we are willing to express the unusual young’s style from common clothing.

The first outfit has a gentle theme. The model is wearing a black, long-sleeve shirt with sliver tie. The shirt, which is made in China, is flimsy. It will keep you cool even on the hottest days. The sliver tie is sharp. It is able to stand out the design and brings out novel feeling. The blue jeans are made from denim. The pair of shoes is white in color.

The next outfit has a sexy theme. There is a yellow short tube dress with a bow at the back. It is added a little sexy element but it still keeps the lovely special quality of the girls. The design of the dress remains much of the young original charm. The black jacket is very unusual because it can make you look thinner. Also, the model is wearing a pair of legging and black high heels.

Thank you very much for your attention and I hope you will like our designs.

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  • Ling
    Lv 7
    1 十年 前
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    Ladies and gentleman, welcome to our show. I am delighted that you’re here.

    Our outfit is designed based on casual theme. Our purpose of the design is comfort and convenience for the young. They are suitable for any place at any time. Also, we are willing to express the unusual young’s style from common clothing.

    The first outfit has a gentle theme. The model is wearing a black, long-sleeved shirt with sliver tie. The shirt is flimsy (flimsy means something very thin but in sense of not too good so may change to use another word) & made in China. It will keep you cool even on the hottest days. The sliver tie is sharp. It is able to stand out the design and brings out novel feeling. The blue jeans are made from denim. The shoes are in white color.

    The next outfit has a sexy theme. IT is a yellow shorts tube dress with a bow at the back. It ( The bow at the back or the dress??) adds a little sexy element but it still keeps the lovely special quality of young ladies or girls. The design of the dress remains much of the young original charm. The black jacket is very unusual because it makes you look thinner ( slimmer is a more classy word for thinner). Also, the model is wearing a pair of legging and black high heels.

    Thank you very much for your attention and hope you will like our designs.

    2009-05-02 18:33:09 補充:

    Also, we are trying to emphasis the unusual young’s style from common clothing.

    IT is a yellow short tube dress

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    1 十年 前

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