lok 發問於 社會及文化語言 · 1 十年前

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Last Sunday, I went to the park with my family. I saw a man ran very fast and he

was taking a full bag. All of sudden, his bag falled something out.

It was money!

Then, I thought it had a bank in this street. And we went on. Oh! It had a robbery in here.

A robber stole very much money away. I saw some police.

I told them what I knew.

At last, the police caught the robber. The banker also thanked me very much.

I will be more care what I see in the road and help the police.

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    I can only help you to correct the composition:

    Last Sunday, I went to the park with my family. There, I saw a man with a large bag was running very fast. Suddenly, something from his bag fell to the floor. It was money!

    Then, as I knew there was a bank near to the park, we decided to take the money to the bank. When we got there, we found out that the bank was just robbed! The thief stole a large sum of money away.

    When the police came, I told them what I just saw in the park. Later on, the police caught the thief. The manager of the bank thanked me for my help. After this incident, I learnt to be more careful when I was on the road and I'll try my best to help the police.

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  • 1 十年前

    Last Sunday, I went to the park with my family. I saw a man ran very fast and he

    was taking a full bag. All of sudden, his bag falled something out.

    It was money!

    Then, I thought it had a bank in this street. And we went on. Oh! It had a robbery in here.

    A robber stole very much money away. I saw some police.

    I told them what I knew.

    At last, the police caught the robber. The banker also thanked me very much.

    I will be more care what I see in the road and help the police.

    改為

    On last Sunday, I went to the park together with my family. I see that run very with him rapidly alone

    Take a full bag. All suddenly, to pack bag into some thing that drop outside he.

    It is the money!

    Then, I think it has a bank in this residential district. And we continue. Oh! It once robs here.

    A robber left much and stole money. I saw some police.

    I tell them what I know.

    Finally, the police catch robbers. The banker thank me very much too.

    I will be the more taking care , I see and help the police in the road .

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